Spendy ~ArtGumshoe.com 6.29

and for chapter 6: I have been reading this chapter a while ago, but failed to do a proper critique for this one until now. The memory is still fresh though and there were a lot of remarkable moments in this book for me to talk about: First of all, I like the topic and what you did with it. Unlike the previous chapter, where they really just stayed inside the hotel room, searching for things to do, this book followed a clear line of events and a "goal" Dana and Nerva went after ("we need clothes for the meeting").

You also included some things which happened before. Like the lights in the hotel corridor scaring Nerva, which is a good thing, because I think the reader understands her nervous tics a little better. They may seem completely random in the beginning, but throughout the comic, I was able to "predict" her actions a little better. I also expected her to freak out when the salesman wanted to take her measurements. It was so expectable, I was already thinking "Uh-oh, this might end bad"! Yes, I feel like this chapter did a great deal in making me able to understand Nerva's behaviour a lot better! I actually think that expectations of a character are a very important thing, as you will be able to get a better feel for them. How they are like, and how they will react in certain situations. Plus, I'm just a fan of hapephobia-moments (as you might have noticed ). Isn't it so very relatable to feel uneasy when a stranger takes your measurements? Even if it's just their job, I'd feel uncomfortable too, really... The way Nerva handled the situation was great, though! Thinking back on how she was absolutely lost when she tried to get off the bus before, she handled herself pretty well. It makes me believe, maybe she did grow a bit more self confident over time? Or kept Dana's words in mind when being confronted with social interaction? Either way, Nerva's charm lies in her being very mysterious, since she doesn't talk about herself ever so often. And I like it! I also like how Dana tries to save her every time. She's pretty good at sensing Nerva's "landmines" now (landmines is a cool word, truly!)

but I have been talking about their characters for long enough now, I suppose ^^°
back to more events of this chapter! In the beginning I thought they will simply buy clothes and go back to the hotel room afterwards (oh what a fool I was!). I honestly didn't expect this scene to be the way it turned out... And it turned out very refined and interesting. I didn't even know it was possible to make so much out of a shopping for clothes scene. The whole beginning seemed kind of mystical to me. You always include some mystic/unexplainable things in your comic (just thinking back to the first chapter). And I really liked the elevator in the clothes shop. This shop didn't appear as a normal one to me. It was much more... mysterious, in a way like how every floor had a different theme and then the two salespeople standing right next to the elevator, waiting for their new customer. Pretty neat, pretty neat. There were so many funny elements in this chapter it really was a pleasure to read. (I still think something strange is up with the clothes shop... like... who knows what will happen if you press the top button? You might end up in an infinite space somewhere in the universe... full with endless rows of clothes! Or at least, that's what I'm imagining )

In the end, the clothes were a lot more expensive than Dana and Nerva thought. But I guess that was to be expected in a posh place such as this one... they might have found cheaper clothes elsewhere, but then surely, it wouldn't have been this exciting and funny to follow Nerva's freak out during the measuring process. Actually, it always makes me think, do you look up the prices that you show in your comic, or do you make them up? Since you put a lot of thought into details, I thought it possible.

Also, nice job with the "ghostly underlit faces". You even made them appear two times, I noticed ^^ strange thing to imagine being in a clothes shop. Just where do you get these great ideas?

"How many suits does one need"? Well I sure hope Nerva's suit won't get torn in a future event of "pursue the culprit". Otherwise I'd feel sorry for them, spending so much money on it...